tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post5639977634068009415..comments2023-10-11T02:20:21.558-07:00Comments on Jessica L. Brooks -- Let Me Tell You A Story: Friends, readers, writers -- lend me your opinions...Jessica L. Brooks (coffeelvnmom)http://www.blogger.com/profile/17524862571932528710noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-36054380741755430432010-09-15T10:12:40.993-07:002010-09-15T10:12:40.993-07:00Thank you so much for your opinions, everyone! I r...Thank you so much for your opinions, everyone! I really appreciate it!Jessica L. Brooks (coffeelvnmom)https://www.blogger.com/profile/17524862571932528710noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-48988638644733067472010-09-15T06:11:38.991-07:002010-09-15T06:11:38.991-07:00#1 works better for me. :)#1 works better for me. :)Linda G.https://www.blogger.com/profile/04576828490765434497noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-8895121035538257522010-09-15T05:02:30.646-07:002010-09-15T05:02:30.646-07:00It's a tight race...but I'm going with #1....It's a tight race...but I'm going with #1.DL Hammonshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02007260062331783715noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-34269863680359868322010-09-15T01:40:17.748-07:002010-09-15T01:40:17.748-07:00I like number two - but I think a reworked combina...I like number two - but I think a reworked combination of the two would work<br /><br />what about referencing the Sandman? Something silly like 'mmmm the Sandman's never looked this good before' *lol* <br /><br />http://damselinadirtydress.blogspot.comNicolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17648307410383451558noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-2562686362797231632010-09-14T14:20:22.536-07:002010-09-14T14:20:22.536-07:00The first one makes better use of irony and has a ...The first one makes better use of irony and has a nicer flow.Lydia Sharphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15328254761920829040noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-47869946153507970882010-09-14T14:17:47.593-07:002010-09-14T14:17:47.593-07:00#1, definitely. Love it! Good luck, Jessica.#1, definitely. Love it! Good luck, Jessica.Pamela Hutchinshttp://www.pamelahutchins.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-7001778557168436152010-09-14T14:06:29.390-07:002010-09-14T14:06:29.390-07:00My vote is with #1. Sounds very intriguing. Good l...My vote is with #1. Sounds very intriguing. Good luck!!<br /><br />AmyA.L. Sonnichsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11358456786727534289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-2381976767481463312010-09-14T10:56:23.218-07:002010-09-14T10:56:23.218-07:00I think the first one is stronger. However, the s...I think the first one is stronger. However, the second one is a close second if you change "in" to "of."Lila Swannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03302548354751216190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-82376912477225908132010-09-14T10:51:56.244-07:002010-09-14T10:51:56.244-07:00Thank you so much for your input, guys! The first ...Thank you so much for your input, guys! The first one was actually mine, the second was someone's suggestion. And then I started worrying about mine, thought maybe I was going about it the wrong way...so I wanted to see what you all thought. <br /><br />Bethany, I don't think I would combine them, only because I want it to sound like me, and for some reason, the second doesn't seem to. (Or maybe I'm just in denial. Ha!)<br /><br />Anne, that word <i>does</i> make a world of difference. Thanks!Jessica L. Brooks (coffeelvnmom)https://www.blogger.com/profile/17524862571932528710noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-11043208062949834062010-09-14T10:39:25.474-07:002010-09-14T10:39:25.474-07:00Okay I like the both of them but I only want to ch...Okay I like the both of them but I only want to change one word each.<br /><br />1) Most teenage girls dream about their first love. Dahlia Kennedy's first love IS the man in her dreams.<br /><br />2) Dahlia Kennedy's first love is Rowan, literally, the man in her dreams.Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-39302321957796391622010-09-14T09:04:06.567-07:002010-09-14T09:04:06.567-07:00I like the flow of number one but the "-lite...I like the flow of number one but the "-literally." really grabs me in number two. Could you combo them?BK Mattinglyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13758638245846622284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-25964600837580880942010-09-14T08:56:46.515-07:002010-09-14T08:56:46.515-07:00Yes, first one's better. It's the neat fl...Yes, first one's better. It's the neat flip-flopping of expectations that does it.Travenerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05160810997837674165noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-38304930300121505252010-09-14T07:37:06.111-07:002010-09-14T07:37:06.111-07:00I like the first one better too. I think it flows...I like the first one better too. I think it flows better. I'd read on from it :)Artemis Greyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10849091563671031929noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7487444177236422658.post-76904478837734804312010-09-14T07:28:31.230-07:002010-09-14T07:28:31.230-07:00I like the first one better. (simple answer)
Good ...I like the first one better. (simple answer)<br />Good luck!Andihttp://www.andistenger.comnoreply@blogger.com